SeaSaltSeeSalt
You came crashing downTook my breath and stung my eyes
A cleansing brine
I remember the taste
Remember the sound
As you came crashing, down and down
As I recovered
Began to dry
I felt you sticky, on my thigh
Another wave rolled in
And we crashed in two
Spread out, splashed back into you
Amazes me how we keep balance
On ever-shifting sands
By holding hands
In ever-rolling waves
Powerful you, powerful me
In the sea salt see
posted by Apollo's Mermaid at 9:00 PM
26 Comments:
this is my favorite very vivid i can picture every detail that you speak.
WOW!
Thank you, Ms. Givens. I enjoyed your blog, as well!
As I was reading it I could hear it as a song in my head. Those are well written lyrics. Did you invent them?
Yes, Athans, this is my original.
nice..good..amazing..beautiful..vivid..all these words dissolve themselves to explain but none in single neither all in collection is able 2 define it..
amazing...beautiful...fascinating....divine..all these words dissolve in an attempt to describe ur lines but none succeed coz ur thoughts r far beyond 4m their range of meanings
its really nice :)
Foarte interesant subiectul postat de tine. M-am uitat pe blogul tau si imi place si am sa mai revin sa-l vizitez. O zi buna
( O _ O ) Nice!... I hope that all yours writing coulbe trasspasing the seas and the lands...
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The Kid with the Head like Egg
My first visit here, and what do I find but a stunning, sensual poem. I could feel the waves crashing down, and hear the tumult in a distant background.
Absolutely wonderful prose.
Excellent !
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i love it! :)
This poem is like a porn without words. Very cool poetry.
P.S I want to say hello to Servant Of The Most High. I see you're still spreading your slanderish spam.
Clicking the "next blog" button can take through a lot of crap, but I really like this. A lot!
Amazing!!
naaice!
Excellent Sam!; As usual, you take my breath away!
I like it. I did seem a little childish at close to then end but overall well done.
really good text :)
Help me please .
"Sticky on my thigh." Who are you, Robert Plant?
A beautiful passage. It's amazing how many similarities there are between poems and songwriting, or even journal entries : ). Are you a musician? I think you could make some amazing lyrics, full of imagery and meaning.
Gorgeous.
Gorgeous.
hello i think your blog is amazing,i would like to be friends with you i am interested in your visions as i get visions too
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